Writing with the Senses — Touch by Teagan Riordain Geneviene

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Sight, Hearing, Touch, Taste, Smell

Welcome back everyone.   I’m sincerely touched that this series has been so well received. But that’s a different kind of touch than the sense of touch.  Working the sense of touch into your writing can bring your words to life.   It helps make it relatable.  Although, I confess that it is the sense that I am most likely to overlook when I’m writing.  Are you ready?  Today we reach out and — Touch

The first thing that comes to my mind when I think of touch is texture.  (Granted, “smooth” is a texture, but I think you know what I mean.)  Texture is pleasing to my eye.  If I decorate a room or put together an outfit, I like to have elements with texture.  Descriptions of a tactile experience can enhance your writing.  Place your hand on your sleeve and think about how you would describe what your sense of touch tells you.

The sense of touch doesn’t have to come as something that your character literally reaches out to touch.  Rather it can include things that touch them, like fog or sunlight.  Also, some objects strongly bring to mind the feeling of touching them — without anyone laying a finger on them.  A good example of this is a screen door or a window screen. 


That reminds me of a scene from my speculative fiction story “Brother Love: A Crossroad.”  Birdie Devovo sees, hears, and smells things that are so strongly connected to the tactile experience of them, that while reading I feel that she placed her hands on them, even when she did not.   When you see a wet ring on a table, don’t you feel the moisture in your mind?  When you look at grass, does the texture of it come to mind?  In the snippet below, we join Birdie on a hot August night.

When the sun finally hid behind the horizon, the heat remained.  I fanned myself futilely with a mimeographed flyer.  It did nothing to alleviate the heat of the night, and the cloying odor of the ink turned my stomach.

I stared at the wet circles on the Formica tabletop as the ice melted in my glass of sweet tea.  Absently I wondered if some pickle juice would remove the rings.

At last, a breeze! I thought with a sigh.

It rustled the pages of the Pan Am calendar hanging on the wall.  August exclaimed “Back to Hawaii” and boasted a man and woman disembarking a plane while greeted by hula dancers and musicians.  That scene was too farfetched for my imagination.

I liked July better.  It showed a couple, suitcases in hand, laughing and walking fast.  Yes, I liked that one best.  They could be anyone, going anywhere… maybe the girl could even me.

The mimeographed flyer floated on the breeze from the table down to the cracked and faded linoleum floor.

For the umpteenth time I wondered who came all the way to the outside of town to leave it, but I was glad I missed them.  They left the ad on the front door.  Brother Love’s Traveling Salvation Show, it read.

Thunder rumbled faintly, very far away.  Maybe there would be rain.

Or maybe not, I thought as I put the damp glass to my forehead.

It had been hot and humid for so long that the heavenly rumble seemed like an empty threat.

I crawled half-under the table to pick up the flyer.  The kitchen light flickered and popped, causing me to bump my head.  Then all the lights went out.

The screen door creaked open.  Normally it would bang shut, but it closed softly.  At the sound of footsteps, I scrunched the rest of the way under the table.

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Your Turn!

Okay, now it’s your turn.  The Pixabay image below of a luxury passenger train of yesteryear could relate to many types of writing, not just fiction.  Gaze at this image.  Really focus and put yourself into it.  Put your suitcase away.  Adjust the window shade.  Sit down on the neatly made bed.  Turn on the lamp.  Pour some water into the glass.  Now describe something that involves your sense of touch.

Orient Express Bed

What did you touch?   Is the blanket cuddly or scratchy?  Can you feel feathers through the pillow case?  Is the water decanter cool?  Did your fingers encounter the powdery texture of dust on the lamp shade? Did you feel a scratch on the windowsill?

22 respuestas a “Writing with the Senses — Touch by Teagan Riordain Geneviene”

  1. Avatar de richardbist

    Another great post on writing. I think it’s important to paint an immersive picture for the reader. As writers, we shouldn’t give them every little details, but enough to allow them to see/feel/hear the scenes and really experience them. Nicely done!

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    1. Avatar de Teagan Riordain Geneviene

      Thanks for your feedback, Richard. I absolutely agree about giving the reader too much. Whether or not it reflects something negative about the human race, the fact remains that people have changed. If they see too many words, then they tune out.
      Have a terrific Tuesday. Hugs.

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  2. Avatar de Teagan Riordain Geneviene

    Hi, Juan. Thanks for hosting me again. I will reblog this post later today, after a morning appointment. But first I need to «reach out and touch» A cup of coffee. ☕☕ Maybe two. LOL. Hugs.

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  3. Avatar de GP

    Loved that story! Plus, now I think of Jinx every time the crows attack my garbage!!

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    1. Avatar de Teagan Riordain Geneviene

      GP, you nearly made me spew this afternoon cup of coffee. LOL. Thanks for all your support — and for remembering Brother Love. Big hugs.

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  4. Avatar de olganm

    Another fantastic post. I agree is not always a sense writers make much use of, but as the piece of writing shows, it can bring a lot of depth and immediacy to the writing. Thanks for this series, Teagan. ♥

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    1. Avatar de Teagan Riordain Geneviene

      Many thanks for your feedback, Olga. Updating the series was a reminder for me as well. Hugs.

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  5. Avatar de Dan Antion

    Your descriptive scenes always have my senses working overtime, Teagan. I’m with GP, I still think of Jinx when I see our crows walking around or perched hi and calling to someone. I know, Jinx was a magpie, but I still cal his name at some of these guys. Thanks for another lesson, and thanks for books and stories full of examples.

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    1. Avatar de Teagan Riordain Geneviene

      Part of my mind sees Jinx as a crow too, Dan, mostly because of your photos of them. Many thanks for commenting. Hugs.

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  6. Avatar de Liz Gauffreau

    Well done! I could feel the condensation on the glass, on both my hand and my forehead as I read. In this paragraph, I described the touch of cold and the touch of heat.

    «The frigid air had begun its assault the night before, the skin of her face stiffening at its touch, so unlike the summer swelter of home that enveloped and caressed. The cold had driven the heat of her life’s blood deep into her core, leaving the rest of her in a desperate huddle and shake trying to find it again.»

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    1. Avatar de Teagan Riordain Geneviene

      Oh, my! That is powerful, Liz. Thanks for sharing it. Hugs!

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      1. Avatar de Liz Gauffreau

        My pleasure, Teagan!

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  7. Avatar de memadtwo

    Your writing always paints a vivid picture Teagan. I never thought about the sensory aspects of it, but that’s certainly a big contributor to it. It’s subtle enough that it just seems natural.

    I tend to rely on visual cues when describing things, but you’ve made me see how much richer I could make them. (K)

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    1. Avatar de Teagan Riordain Geneviene

      I’m honored, Kerfe. Thanks for this feedback. It’s fun to simply do little exercises about. I wonder what kind of collage you could make of «things that I like to touch»? All I can think of is various fabrics, maybe rose petals. At least as far as non perishable things anyway. I’m just being playful. LOL. Hugs.

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  8. Avatar de DanielleM

    This was informative and inspiring. I will definitely challenge myself to use the sense of touch in my future writing.

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    1. Avatar de Teagan Riordain Geneviene

      I’m delighted that you enjoyed this, Danielle. It’s nice to blog-meet you. Hugs.

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      1. Avatar de DanielleM

        Hi Teagan, it’s nice to blog-meet you too!

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  9. Avatar de D. Wallace Peach

    I remember that scene, Teagan, and could almost feel the breeze.

    What a fun study of that image with a focus on touch. The opportunities to engage that sense are all over the place. It’s interesting how evocative images can be for describing something – beyond its appearance. Great exercise.

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  10. Avatar de Resa

    A wonderful article, Teagan, thank you!

    I felt that thing that loops down over the bed. Seemed a bit rough, and felt like a mystery.

    Thank you to  Juan Ré Crivello for hosting this series!

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  11. Avatar de robertawrites235681907

    Hi Juan, this is another great article by Teagan. I read Brother Love on her blog and must revisit the book. Meanwhile I’m reading The Alchemist and the Woman in Trousers which is fabulous.

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  12. Avatar de j re crivello

    Hi Robbie, it was a good idea to add Teagana to Masticadores and LatinosUSA. I’m always looking for authors to improve what we offer. Thanks for letting me know. Best regards. Juan

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